A Wolf and A Deer |

A touch
I can not
A kiss
I never dare to dream
My caress
Would make you bleed
The longing that you felt
The blood-lust that i had
I am a wolf
Whose falling in love
With a deer

Tgr, October 2014

25 thoughts on “A Wolf and A Deer”

Asyik idenya, Mas. Suaranya juga liris. Cuman perlu satu koreksi “whose” mestinya “who’s”… atau untuk memberi tekanan pada meter, sekalian gak pakai “who’s” langsung saja, “I’m a wolf/falling in love/with a deer.” 🙂

Alf Sukatmo says: 20/10/2014 at 04:25

Ah begitu.. Terima kasih koreksinya.

Waaaaah…kereeen sekalii puisinya!! ^^b

Alf Sukatmo says: 15/10/2014 at 20:09

Oh ya? Trima kasih.
- justjustomat says: 15/10/2014 at 20:33
  
  Iya, bagus. Aku belum bisa bikin begitu. Idenya sederhana tapi indah. halaghsok tau aku* Hehehe….
  - Alf Sukatmo says: 15/10/2014 at 20:46
    
    Ah.. itu sih terlalu merendah. Tulisan-tulisan di blogmu jg bagus.
    - justjustomat says: 16/10/2014 at 12:32
      
      Wah, makasih udah mampir ke blog aku 😀
    - Alf Sukatmo says: 16/10/2014 at 14:58
      
      Sama-sama.

❤

Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 18:20

Thank you, Montse! 🙂

LDR aja kalo gitu… pasti aman 😀

btw, a wild creature that falls in love with his prey reminds me of Twilight, ugh… I like the poet tho

Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 12:06

Hahaha.. LDR
Oh iya ta.. Di Twilight bukankah buruannya malah menjadi predator?
- silananda says: 14/10/2014 at 12:30
  
  awalnya bau darah Bella kan yang bisa memancing insting vampir si Edward, padahal Edward udah lama gak minum darah manusia hanya darah binatang.. he feels that blood-lust instinct only for her but also fall in love with her (atau mungkin justru itu penyebabnya?)
  
  I hate the movie but I remember the storyline, it’s a curse, duh…
  - Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 12:35
    
    Dan Bella ternyata tidak takut pd monster. Mbulet dan cliche sebetulnya..
    - silananda says: 14/10/2014 at 12:41
      
      iya, karena dia juga sempat bimbang antara memilih si vampir Edward atau si werewolf Jacob… klise dan tokoh Bella di sini Mary-Sue banget sampe bikin aku geregetan tingkat kabupaten
    - Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 12:56
      
      Nah.. Sebetulnya yg dua cowok itu bego juga. Nah sdh tau ada bimbang antara 2. Cari yg lain knapa..
    - silananda says: 14/10/2014 at 13:06
      
      exactly… kalo ceritanya kayak gitu gak akan ada Twilight Saga, which is better for all of us, hehe..
    - Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 13:17
      
      Hehe..

I wish I could like this twice. Very good.

Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 00:09

You already did, a like and your comment. It’s more than twice.
Thank you! 🙂
- travelosopher says: 14/10/2014 at 00:11
  
  aha! Good math! 🙂
  - Alf Sukatmo says: 14/10/2014 at 00:12
    
    hahaha. Thanks again.

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Alf Sukatmo says: 13/10/2014 at 23:24

Thanks, Lisa.
- Lisa says: 13/10/2014 at 23:58
  
  Your welcome 🙂

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